Thread:Mephistophele/@comment-25569987-20150424194027/@comment-25876934-20150424195806

Excellent. I do have one nitpicky thing- the second paragraph. It feels more like a blurb of information than a piece of a narrative. I know that this might be weird, but... think the intro of Avatar. It gives the basic backstory, like what you're doing, without seeming like 'here's what you need to know, have fun bye'.